Talk:Pyramid
Work Checklist[edit]
My last edit I did some basic edits, sentence structure clean ups, further context clarification, run on sentence elimination. This still needs work.
I like the section about the ranks. I will add pictures if I can find appropriate ones that don't need a lot of image manipulation to remove dialog balloons and other noise.
The history section is a blow-by-blow list, rather dry and towards the end becomes disjointed and choppy. Needs more of a history about the organization, how it started, grew and become a dominate worldwide crime organization. Its current status would be a good ending point. Even if the details aren't mentioned directly, questions about how they grew would serve the purpose of what I am looking for here.
Some of the blow by blow can be injected into the broader history narrative, the extra can be listed as bullet points in the Observation section.--Infobroker (talk) 18:49, 26 March 2017 (PDT)
